PEScapes-
I checked out your sight. Good job on getting it going!
Three things that popped out right away (less to do with the descriptions) for me that you might want to consider addressing - even though you mention someone should contact you regarding the shipping fee - that won't stop someone from buying it and they wil not be charged shipping. You really don't want to find youself in that position. You should package your soap in a mailer (or however you plan to package) and weigh it. Find zipcodes N/S/E/W of you on the coasts and see using the USPS how much it would weigh - find the right price and determine what should be charged for (s/h) to ship one soap and setup a shipping profile in the US. One thing I did was poke around at other soap shipping profiles who had similar weight as mine. I then figured it out based on how I packaged and came up with the appropriate fee. I encourage you to take a look at this!
The other thing is the photos - you should try and use up at least 3 photos. - taking from different angles Yes, it's alot of work but it will pay off !!
Tagging - you want to use all tags. Check out my site as an example - I'm still learning and striving but I think you'll see what I mean - with the photos and the tags .
www.asliceofelight.etsy.com. Also check out ---
http://www.etsy.com/shop/sunbasilgarden - she's got some amazing talent when it comes to displaying her soaps! and her write ups too.
As for the write ups you just have to think about what motivated you to come up with the design and the fragrance - and start typing. Also don't type it in the listing - go to MS word and play around a bit then when you have it copy it over. That might help too. I have trouble too as well but I actually enjoy the description activity. I sometimes I use song bites, phrases or quotes. You'll get the hang after you've done a few.
I hope I was of some help and please take my comments not as a negative critique but as someone who wants to help you succeed!
Thanks
Hilary